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生活感受类 幸福。。。

大作文谨记
? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? 1. Summary不能出现拼写和句型错误!! 保证正确性的基础上,用好句型,总分结构 2. 正文: 1)下笔前想好每段过渡 2)经历要注意反向思维,先想好最后议论再设计例子,突出 重点 3)议论一定要分点!! 大作文拿高印象分方法 基本:卷面整洁

,字整齐 1. summary不出错 2. 每段第一句,明显突出题目关键字,不出错,好句型 3. 段中有分点 4. 结尾,有谚语,醒目句型

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阅读下面的短文,然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。 Around twenty years ago I was living in Seattle and going through hard times. With rich experience and a Master‘s degree, to my shame, I could only drive a school bus to make ends meet. Later that afternoon, I dropped off a little girl in a quiet suburban neighborhood. As she passed she handed me an earring, saying I should keep it in case somebody claimed it. The earring was painted black and said 'BE HAPPY'. It hit me. I had been putting all of my energies into what was wrong with my life rather than what was right! I decided then and there to make a list of 50 things I was grateful for. At first it was hard, then it got easier. One day I decided to up it to 75. My life was completely changed. I know that it was because I changed my attitude to gratitude, which is the key to happiness. I spent the next year conducting training workshops all around the Seattle area and then decided to risk everything and go back to Scotland where I had lived previously. I closed my one man business, bought a plane ticket and got a six month visa. One month later I met my wonderful English wife and best friend of 15 years now. We live in a small beautiful cottage, two miles from a paved road in the highlands of Scotland. 【写作内容】 1. 以约30个词概括以上短文的主要内容; 2. 然后以约120个词就“幸福”话题写一篇短文,内容包括: (1) 请讲述一件你经历过的幸福的事情; (2) 简述你对幸福的理解。 [写作要求] 1. 作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事.也可以参照阅读材料的内容,但不得 直接引用原文中的句子。 2. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

? 再次提醒,summary 不用第一人称 ? 要点概况:hard times, complain, earrings from a girl, ―Be Happy‖, gratitude, happiness ? 记叙文的summary: ? 起因– 经过– 结果– (感悟) ? 例子不要翻到小学幼儿时期好不好! ? 找个万能结构,搭起有效例子的框架。

起承转合, how to improve your example to make it convincing and touching. short as the story is, it induces a slight ripple in my mind, reminding me of my own experience. Once it rained when I was at school, do heavy the rain was that I could leave because I didn‘t have an umbrella. When feeling upset, I saw a classmate who had left coming back with one more umbrella. He came back to help me though he could have left me alone. I was grateful what he did and thus, a strong feeling of happiness hit me. Had it not been for my gratitude I would have treated it normally but not happily. Short as the story is, it induces a slight ripple in my mind, reminding me of my own experience. With the heavy rain outside, I had to stay in the classroom, feeling lonely and upset. Hearing a big sound of pushing open the door, I raised my head and saw David coming towards me with a bright smile and a big umbrella– he came back specially to help me! At that moment, I was overwhelmed with a strong sense of happiness and I felt so grateful. Had it not been for the help from my friend, I would not have known I was always remembered and cared about. Had it not been for the rainy day, I would not have known I was the lucky and happy one.

? Short as the story is, it induces a slight ripple in my mind, reminding me of my own experience. With the heavy rain outside,(起) I had to stay in the classroom, feeling lonely and upset. (承)Hearing a big sound of pushing open the door, I raised my head and saw David coming towards me with a bright smile and a big umbrella– he came back specially to help me! (转)At that moment, I was overwhelmed with a strong sense of happiness and I felt so grateful.(合) Had it not been for the help from my friend, I would not have known I was always remembered and cared about. Had it not been for the rainy day, I would not have known I was the lucky and happy one. (抖一抖)

? On reading the story, I opened the box of memory in my heart to find my own experience of happiness. Once upon a time, I got my leg hurt and could not move a lot. I was undoubtedly upset at first, but soon I changed my mind. I surprisingly found that it was because of my hurt leg that I could settle down to have a good view of the flowers, the little birds in this splendid world. It was because of my hurt leg that l lost in thought and refreshed myself. When my mother came in with a bowl of soup, I burst into tears with happiness and joy filled in my heart! Happiness, thicker than blood! I felt it! Happiness is there with love of life. ? 转的原因不明确,例子过于零散(2部分)抖一抖没能准确回应例子 ? The story opened the box of my memory and my own experience of happiness came out. With a broken leg. I stayed at home, feeling bored and upset. At that moment, my mom came back with sweat on her forehead and a full basket of food in her hand. She was going to cook delicious food for me! When my mother came in with a bowl of soup, I burst into tears with happiness and joy filled in my heart! Had it not been for my broken leg, I would not have realized I was always loved and cared by my families. Had it not been for my broken leg, I would not have known I was the happiest person in the world.

? The story opened the box of my memory and my own experience of happiness came out. With a broken leg,(起) I stayed at home, feeling bored and upset. (承)At that moment, my mom came back with sweat on her forehead and a full basket of food in her hand. She was going to cook delicious food for me! (转)When my mother came in with a bowl of soup, I burst into tears with happiness and joy filled in my heart! (合) Had it not been for my broken leg, I would not have realized I was always loved and cared by my families. Had it not been for my broken leg, I would not have known I was the happiest person in the world. (抖一抖)

Happiness by 日扬
? The author was going through hard times when a little girl presented him an earring with words “Be Happy” on it, which helped him find the key to happiness –gratitude. Later he led a happy life with his wife.

? So impressive is the story that it induces a slight ripple in my heart, reminding me of my previous experience of happiness. It was an early morning of last Tree Planting Day, and my family set off to a nearby hill to plant some trees. Roads were rough and tools were heavy, but we managed to plant a lot of lovely tress, making the hill greener and more beautiful. Despite the hot weather and the smelly body because of the hard work, I had a strong sense of success and happiness . Had it not been for the hard day, I would not have felt that happiness was so close to me. ? It isn’t hard to find from the author’s story and mine that happiness doesn’t have to be complicated or luxurious, it is nothing but simple and sincere. Happiness can be obtained with a gratitude attitude towards life or created with our own hands, but no matter how it comes, it will colour our life, refresh our spirit and light up our heart. ? Grasp every opportunity to enjoy happiness and share it with your beloved.

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读写任务: One night my wlife was preparing dinner while our son was busy writing something on a piece of paper. I was so curious about what on earth he was writing that I got close to him for a look. Here was the paper which read: For washing the car--$5.00;For playing with little sister--$0.25;For getting a good report card--$5.00;For cleaning the dinner table--$2.00;Total--$12.25 With an eager look, he gave it to his mum, standing there expecting payment. After reading it, my wife didn‘t say a word, but picked up the pen and turned the paper over. She quickly noted down something as follows: For 10 months I carries you—No charge;For the toys, food and clothes you have—No charge ;The full cost of my love—No charge No sooner had our son finished reading it than he had big tears in his eyes. He gave his mum a tight hug and said, ―Mummy, I love you!‖ Then, he took the pen and in great big letters wrote on the ―bill‖: ―ALL PAID.‖ Both of us looked at each other with smiles, knowing that our son had realized mum‘s love was priceless. 【写作内容】 以约30个词概括短文的主要内容。 以约120个词,以“母爱无价”为题,记一件有关母爱的感人的事件,包括以下内容 要点: – 描述你读完短文的感受; – 以个人或自己朋友的经历写一件有关母爱的感人的事件; – 总结你对母爱的理解。 – Motherly love, maternal love (母爱)paternal love (父爱) the greatness of their motherhood.

审题!!!谋篇!!! 想好大概每点多少行,才下笔!!
1)描述你读完短文的感受; 最多三行!!! 感受:形容词为主,表达感觉,不是启示!不要和第三点重复 2)以个人或自己朋友的经历写一件有关母爱的感人的事件; 事例段框架: 1.承上启下句 2. 起承转合!四句话 3. 抖抖句 3)总结你对母爱的理解。 1. 谚语名言开头,如果没有就先来个总起,翻译题目!!! 能不能用to sum up??? 2. 连续两句比喻类的排比,或者加入not…but..结构 3. 倒装句结尾,升华强调 这点不宜过短,4-5行为宜 还要有2行作为结尾段!!!

? 梁晓欣 ? After I read the simple story above, a surge of warmth from mother‘s love crowded in my heart. Words fail to convey the priceless and greatness of mother‘s love, which can be felt only by heart and soul. ? The same as the boy above, I also grow up under a shelter brimful of mother‘s love. The following experience is an impressive case in point.(过渡+总起) It was in the last year of junior middle school when I had to get up earlier than ever in the morning. (起)To guarantee my health in such a critical and tiresome period, my mother would always get up ahead of me to prepare nutritious breakfast for me. (承)One freezing winter morning, darkness hadn‘t faded away.(转) But I was awaken by the sound from the kitchen where my mum was busy preparing my breakfast. (合)Tears clouded my eyes the moment I saw her figure in the soft light, slim but the most beautiful and greatest one I‘d ever seen, brightening my whole life with the glorious glow of mother‘s love.(抖+总结升华) ?

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Unlike the profound and deep father‘s love, mother‘s love is unconditional and meticulous. (总 起,点题)It is the very spring when we are confronted with drought in life; it is the very cure and remedy when we are undergoing the torture of physical and mental weaknesses; it is the very light when we are sinking into the dark depth of depression and sorrow. (比喻排比)Without the greatest love, what else could moisten our hearts in such an unconditional, selfless and priceless way. (总结句) ? Therefore, let‘s treasure the pure mother‘s love, carve it deep in our hearts and be grateful for what we are blessed.(结尾总结段)

如果可以举别人的例子
? The best of motherhood is the sprit of selfless dedication and tireless teachings for children. A strong evidence is given as follows. When a mother?s child in danger , she is always heedless of her personal safety to rescue her child. In WENCHUAN earthquake, A mother legs kneeled on the ground, leaned forward, two hands supported the body. When the rescuers arrived at the time, she has already died. But her child was under her body to be saved. In the mother's side, there was a mobile phone, a message has been edited. It said that: to my dear, if you could live, you must remember that I love you! All the people present were moved.

背诵范文
? After I read this enlightening passage with profound meaning, it induces slight ripples of my gratitude and thankfulness to my beloved mother for her lifelong selfless love and affection. (点明感受) ? People often say that maternal love is the greatest love in the world. In the past, I thought the great love was too far away from real life. But a relative of mine, who was a mother, totally changed my view. She donated her kidney to her son, though the doctor advised her not to because she is too old. When we visited her after the operation, she smiled and said that she gave him another chance to live as if she gave birth to him again. We were deeply touched by the selfless and immortal love. This kind of love means that the mother is willingly to do anything for you and she is responsible to any of your needs as a person. ? From my perspective, maternal love is mother‘s affectionate feelings for her children and is a generous offer with no strings attached .(一项 不带任何条件的慷慨给与,没有谚语就可以用下定义的方式 ) Maternal love is like a running stream that sings its melody for you. It is like the sunshine in winter that gives you warmth. It is like a gust of breeze that blows into your heart. Without it, never can we grow up in a complete world, and grow up with an integral personality (人格完整). ? Therefore, when love beckons to you, follow it, feel it and touch it. While we take from her, we give her back twice as much.

? The way to your mather's heart is to eat her food with relish. 能让母亲快乐的方法,就是有滋味地吃掉她做的食物。 ? A mother's love is like a circle. It has no begining and no ending. 母爱就像一个圆。没有起点,也没有终点。 ? A mother understands what a child does not say. 母亲最懂孩子心。 ? Real mothers know that a child's growth is not measured by height or years or grads. It is marked by the progression of Mama to Mummy to Mother. 真正的母亲都知道,孩子的成长不是 用身高、年龄或年级来衡量的。它是由孩子从“妈妈”到“妈咪”到 “母亲”的称呼来记录的。 ? A mother is she who can take the place of all others but whose place no one else can take. 母亲可以取代一切,母亲的地位却无人能够替代。 ? A mother is a person who if she is not there when you get home from school you wouldn't know how to get your dinner, and you wouldn't feel like eating it anyway. 当你放学回家的时候, 如果母亲不在家里,你就不知道该吃些什么,或者什么都不想吃。 ? Of all the things that come in numbers--plenty of rainbows, stars in the sky, brothers, sisters, aunts, uncles, cousins--you have but one mother. 你可以有众多的事物--缤纷的彩虹,闪耀的星 星,兄弟姐妹,叔伯姨舅,但是你只有一个妈妈

? A good mother is worth a hundred schoolmaster. — —George Herbert(1593—1633) 一位好母亲抵得上一百个教师。 ——乔治· 赫伯特 ? Youth fades; love droops; the leaves of friendship fall. A mother's secret hope outlives them all.—— Oliver Wendell Holmes(1809—1894)? 青春会逝去;爱情会枯萎;友谊的绿叶也会凋零。而一个 母亲内心的希望比它们都要长久。 ——奥利弗· 温戴尔· 荷 马 ? God could not be everywhere and therefore he made mothers. ——Jewish proverb 上帝不能无处不在,因此他创造了母亲。 ——犹太谚语 ? The heart of a mother is a deep abyss at the bottom of which you will always find forgiveness.——Balzac (1799—1850)? 母亲的心是一个深渊,在它的最深处你总会得到宽 恕。 ——巴尔扎克


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